Normally such short sentences would make for choppy reading, but you did it so well that it really wasn’t noticeable after the first paragraph or so. Bravo, and I look forward to reading more from you!bry2715Report 2010-12-31 13:45:45good story but it went A little to fast for me couldn’t really get the grip on it you told it so fast.anonymous readerReport 2010-09-19 08:08:25Too many sentences. Amateur porn Normally such short sentences would make for choppy reading, but you did it so well that it really wasn’t noticeable after the first paragraph or so. Bravo, and I look forward to reading more from you!bry2715Report 2010-12-31 13:45:45good story but it went A little to fast for me couldn’t really get the grip on it you told it so fast.anonymous readerReport 2010-09-19 08:08:25Too many sentences. Thanks, too for putting some affection built up over time between Ben and Zac in, too, as it showed their bond growing as they each did what they could to show they cared for the other before making the ultimate effort to get together, rather than the typical sex-right-away model that’s prevalent in most stories on here.
