16 comments«1234»anonymous readerReport 2012-03-07 23:43:04paragraphs are a must for any storyanonymous readerReport 2012-03-07 16:56:41paragraphs are a must for any storyanonymous readerReport 2011-09-21 15:39:06Your story was good and the sex was hot, but it was hardd to read. Amateur porn Don’t give up, you may want to rewrite this story and see if the comments improve.anonymous readerReport 2011-04-07 08:34:59F-ING amazing. Writting must have comas, quotations, and paragraohs. I read it through all the way. Read the story yourself and I am sure you will understand what I and others are telling you. This story was hot. I didn’t care about the paragraph breaks. Don’t give up, you may want to rewrite this story and see if the comments improve.anonymous readerReport 2011-04-07 08:34:59F-ING amazing. Your writting is like someone talking without changing tones or expressions. Don’t give up, you may want to rewrite this story and see if the comments improve.anonymous readerReport 2011-04-07 08:34:59F-ING amazing. Don’t give up, you may want to rewrite this story and see if the comments improve.anonymous readerReport 2011-04-07 08:34:59F-ING amazing.
