that being said I know this is a work of fiction but you raced through several things that should have had more of a build up. at one part in these last few chapters during the threesome with His girlfriend and cousin I could not tell which one was doing what since you failed to name who the third party person was until the end. Amateur porn cliffhangers are not fun«12345» so I will give this story series an overall 5/10. You really need to add more chapters.Anonymous readerReport 2016-07-09 02:19:27Hot that all of them got pregnant with his baby. while the plot was decent and had some alluring elements, it was lacking character development and realism. so I will give this story series an overall 5/10. While my work is far from perfect and I do tend to make mistakes while writing, I do however go back and do some editing and get someone to proofread for me. at one part in these last few chapters during the threesome with His girlfriend and cousin I could not tell which one was doing what since you failed to name who the third party person was until the end.
