The only bad thing I found that should be addressed is that you should proof-read it a few times before publishing it. I am looking forward to seeing more from you so I hope you write more. Amateur porn but I really enjoyed your story, and your ideas. 3 comments«1»animal99Report 2013-11-30 15:04:15I had to log in to write this:
I really enjoyed your story. Good story.. The only bad thing I found that should be addressed is that you should proof-read it a few times before publishing it. 3 comments«1»animal99Report 2013-11-30 15:04:15I had to log in to write this:
I really enjoyed your story. The only bad thing I found that should be addressed is that you should proof-read it a few times before publishing it. The only bad thing I found that should be addressed is that you should proof-read it a few times before publishing it. now write a sequel :)anonymous readerReport 2013-11-30 01:01:17teri maa ki saale. now write a sequel :)anonymous readerReport 2013-11-30 01:01:17teri maa ki saale. Good story.. You’ve got the story-telling part down (done right) but your mistakes in the sentences kinda threw things off for me. Good story.. Good story.. Good story.. The only bad thing I found that should be addressed is that you should proof-read it a few times before publishing it.
